среда, 28 октября 2009 г.

Do people spend too much money on pets?

In Western countries, people spend a lot of money on their pets. They buy special food for their cats or dogs, buy them toys and often pay high fees for medical treatment. Some people think this is a waste of money and argue that pets are dirty and dangerous.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of having pet? Do people spend too much money on pets?

me trying (first version)

The pets have a big role in the modern Humen's life. During the wars or disaster the animal rescue and help people. Animal and human ties century-old history. In spite of that
we should not spend a lot of money on cats or docs. In my opinion we have next resons.

Firts of all, everyday thousends of human die of hunger. This money could be spent on food for people. Buy drugs and create basic education.

Second of all, the special food for cats or dogs is a big business which selling dreams. Usual human food are often suitable for animals. Unfortunaly people believe in advertising.

Finally, according to the Bible we have to use animal for improving our daily life. Otherwise, animal use human. I think it is not right.

So, money that use for food or toys must be use increase living conditions of human and them only for pets.

понедельник, 26 октября 2009 г.

Diagram: Greenhouse effect

In the Academic Writing Module you may be given to description about diagram or graph. You should spend only 20 minutes on this task and you should write at least 150 words. The next topic shows a simple. I tried to write this task. The name of Thema - "Greenhouse Effect". I can't show you diagramm becouse i don't have time to copy from book.

"Greenhouse Effect"

The diagram shows a process of climate changes. Everyday we use more and more fossil fuels for our daily lives. We are continue to cutting down forests. Soon after, the waste in the from of carbon dioxide and other gases emit hude clouds, which pollute the atmospgere. In result, the natural system is out of balance. The gases trap heat which would normally escape
into space, thus producing the 'greenhouse effect'. In this case, the warming increases water vapour in the air, and more heat is absorbed into the atmosphere. If carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases continue to pour into the atmosphere unchecked, the world will warm rapidly. Rising temperatures will melt snow and ice, and sea levels will rise. Many of the Earth's cities are built on the coast, and a rise in sea level will spell disaster for them.

воскресенье, 11 октября 2009 г.

Working hours today are too long and people are not spending as much as they should with their families or on leisure activities. What is your opinion

    In many counties often told about the reduction working hours. The dreams about more leisure activities in twenty one century were broken. The higher technologies didn’t make any free times for peoples life. We have been working more and more. We don’t have more money, we don’t have more rest and we don’t have more happiness. The future of today are difference the future of the pass.


    First of all, I would like to say that too long working hours make peoples more stressed. Peoples don’t have enough free time for rest, sleeps and leisure of course. That’s reasons of many diseases and rapid aging. In result, we have been died with regret about stupid and boring life. We did not know about environment and we don’t know about any family’s happiness. It is very terrible.


    Second of all, short working hours will have created new jobs. In this case the economics of many countries would be increases. Most of peoples will have job and money. Most of people will have more leisure activities and rest their families. We will have less hunger and died. Peoples will have started think about kids and beautiful of lives.


    Finally, short working hours will have created more free time for making new ideas. People could be thinking about changes of lives and making more and more interesting things. We were born for building. We weren’t born for job. We have only one life. It is all that we have. Everybody must be having chosen.

После просмотра данного эссе были сделаны следуюшие замечания:

  • В эссе необходимо употребление сложных оборотов
  • Нет примеров "мелких" типа мой знакомы делал то-то и получилось то-то, что было неверным. а все глобально.
  • Много не английских конструкций.
  • Необходимо поработать с грамматикой (времена) и смыслом.


Привожу немного проработанную версию:


It’s known in many countries told about the reduction working hours. The dreams about more leisure activities were broken in twenty one century. High technologies didn’t make any free times for peoples life. We have been working more and more. We don’t have more money, we don’t have enough rest and we don’t have much happiness. Today’s future is different from our understanding of the future in the past.


First of all, I think that too long working hours make peoples more stressed. People don’t have enough free time for rest, sleeping and leisure of course. That’s reason of many diseases and rapid aging. In result, we will die with regret about stupid and boring life. We did not know the environment and we don’t know about any family’s happiness. It is very terrible. My old friend worked hard and now, he doesn’t have wife, kids and youth. He also stressed and can’t found an interesting job.


Second of all, short working hours will create new jobs. In this case the economics of many countries would be increased. Most of people will have job and money. Most of people will have more leisure activities and rest their families. We will have less hunger and death. People will start to think about kids and beautiful of lives.


Finally, short working hours will create more free time for making new ideas. People will think about changes of lives and make more and more interesting things. We were born for building. We weren’t born for job. We have only one life. It is all that we have. Everybody must be having chosen.